Final thriller opening

Photos for Final Evaluation

Pictures for Evaluation

not finished.

Evaluations

Our previous project of the childrens film opening, we believe wasn't as successful as we had hoped however with this in mind we made sure we were 100% focused on making our thriller opening better. The evaluation I made from last time wasn't as detailed as it could have been therefore now that i have another opportunity to do this, I'm going to try and make it better than the first.

Finish.

Working together we were able to complete our thriller opening before the final deadline of 12pm Friday the 19th March. We feel this is a great achievement as it encourages good teamwork and cooperation.

10 Seconds Short.

Due to our feedback given last week, we made sure that we cut some of the filming in the bedroom scene to make sure it didn't drag on too long making our audience loose interest. This unfortunately has left us 10 seconds short on footage meaning 10 seconds less than the two minutes. We were told this would not decrease our overall marks, however to us this is disappointing as we planned on not having enough footage making a new storyboard leading to over 2 minutes.
To fill the nine seconds we decided to make the ident longer, this was a piece of our feedback from the class stating that our ident was successful however it wasn't shown off enough.

Feedback

Our original idea for our thriller opening was to have a tape recorder in the background of every scene (except the one's where Ben is talking) to add effect and produce clear sound to the audience. Having had feedback from the class, it was said that the tape recorder was needed as the sound produced by Ben was very quiet. As we didn't have time to add in the sound for the tape recorder we didn't have this in our rough cut draft however it is an essential feature to our film and therefore will be included before Friday's final day.
On Tuesday 9th March - we discovered that their was an element of sound missing from our thriller opening from around 2minutes 10 - 2 minutes 40. This was important because we had limited time to add it in and it was important for adding effect, therefore Eloise and I made sure we completed it in this time on Tuesday for the rough cut on Friday. We managed to produce some sound however we discussed it as a group and decided that it wasn't the right genre type to add in for our final deadline, therefore we again, had to change it. Over all, from now, I feel our thriller opening is coming together leaving us just enough time to make the ideal changes it takes for a better outcome.

Feedback on Roughcut Thriller

Overall, we got good feedback on our thriller opening, including on our Camera angles, Music, Makeup and Location and Shots.
Things that we need to work on are, Our title, Dialogue, The length of the room scene and Diegetic Sound.
Our title was said to have been a bit random coming into the shot because it was too quick so we are going to improve this by extending it to be being longer however we're going to be keeping it in the same position. The dialogue needs to be louder as you cannot hear the speech from Ben clearly therefore we are planning on him saying it on a tape recorder and replacing the original sound. The indent that we created needs to be on screen for a bit longer as it was considered really good but disappeared too quickly, we also need to position it into the movie more than we have already, maybe introduce a transition. The length of the room scene was said to be too long, so therefore we are going to crop it to reduce it. This will be positive to the movie introduction as it will cut down the time of it over all. At the beginning of the opening,the sound consists of a certain noise that appears to be a bowling bowl, the feedback we got with this is that it doesnt work with the genre of the film and therefore we are going to either remove it or cut it from the sound clip on final cut.
Having got all this feedback we now know how to work on improving our thriller opening so that it is more engaging to our directed audience.

Roughcut thriller

Change Of plans 2

We had to change the location in the 'Garage scene' to Eloises room, as her garage is currently occupied by some family items.
We have also changed some plans on how we are going to film it, but they are only minor changes. The changes were that we were not using the 360 degree spin at the beginning, Instead we were replacing this with an extreme close up on the mask Ben holds in the scene, the close up will last around 20seconds to avoid the audience missing a crucial part of the film opening.

24th February

I had a white jacket which I thought if we made it damp along with the ends of my hair the overal look would be more interesting. I decided against the MDF board because I fet there was no place for it, instead i moved everything out the bathroom to give impact to the whiteness of the room. I filled the bath with water and put red facepaint in there to make it look like blood. We squirted tomatoe ketchup on me to make it look like blood.

I had the idea that the victim wore a mask with the murderers riddle written across it to make the murder look more visually interesting and so the detective has something towards the reason why the murder has taken place. I painted the mask using acrylic paint and attatched fake eyelashes to the mask to make it look more freaky. I originally made the mask a while ago so for this project I only added the writing.

Abby was the camera person, she attatched the tripod to a skateboard using black tape so the tracking shot at the begining would be smooth.

Fiona used red face paint and was hoping to give the effect of blood from the murderers hand.

Using my facepaint Abby and Fiona created the scratches on my arm and leg and gave me a bruised neck to give the sense I had been strangled. This is because other cultures label 'the legend of the sphinx' as 'the strangler' I thought the final act of the murderer could be to strangle their victims.

Fiona created the outfit to have a grungy ripped looked which looked quite effective on film.

Here are some images of the bruised neck.

For fiona as the scientist we used my mask, goggles and white apron from art, she wore a white top and black leggings with her hair tied back. We used a green bag full of plastic sachets and tweasers and bottles etc to give a few props to add to her character.